if there's good in this world i believe it has missed me
if love is for real then that girl never kissed me
i never once wanted my gift
it has brought me
the life of a dreamer who's soul is now ripped
i never did anything right in my life
but i loved more than you ever will
that is right
and i got less than you ever got in return
so i've been thru more pain
you do not know the burn
you will never relate to my clouds
and how all of this world and it's bullshit
kept throwing me down
i know death is release from a world full of pain
for a dreamer who dreamed he could fly beyond rain
© 2004
Nicely done. Raw and emotional.
Posted 6/9/2004 11:45 AM by zoedark
... i don't think i've read any poetry you've written that wasn't amazing ... but the best parts of your poetry seem to be your ending lines ... they're very demanding ... makes one stand up and take notice, to read the poem again ... occasionally, you have brought tears ... it's very beautiful ...
Posted 6/10/2004 12:04 AM by gods_baby_angel
A very interesting poem... nice job! Peace,
Posted 6/10/2004 3:16 AM by Periculosus_Z
BEAUTIFUL last line!!! do you mind if i put it on my site?
Posted 6/12/2004 10:06 PM by AcrosstheSky
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